This one is full of writing errors as well as leaving the reader wondering why you omitted the whole second page. Indian sex There should have been so much more.anonymous readerReport 2013-09-18 00:55:15this story is faster than you can fap withanonymous readerReport 2013-09-18 00:46:49You really need to work on your writing. It really needs to be at least a page longer to flesh out the story. 7 comments«12»Anonymous readerReport 2015-04-24 07:00:11More chapters pleaseanonymous readerReport 2013-10-18 21:23:44Slow down and write the whole story. You seemed to be in a great hurry to dash this off and go do something else. There should have been so much more.anonymous readerReport 2013-09-18 00:55:15this story is faster than you can fap withanonymous readerReport 2013-09-18 00:46:49You really need to work on your writing. There should have been so much more.anonymous readerReport 2013-09-18 00:55:15this story is faster than you can fap withanonymous readerReport 2013-09-18 00:46:49You really need to work on your writing. You seemed to be in a great hurry to dash this off and go do something else. It was a little fast and the sex scene was incomplete.
