7 comments«12»Anonymous readerReport 2015-04-24 07:00:11More chapters pleaseanonymous readerReport 2013-10-18 21:23:44Slow down and write the whole story. You obviously didn’t take time to proof-read it.anonymous readerReport 2013-09-17 21:30:55tell us your dirty secret at americasdirtysecrets dot us«12» It was a little fast and the sex scene was incomplete. Indian sex video It really needs to be at least a page longer to flesh out the story. There should have been so much more.anonymous readerReport 2013-09-18 00:55:15this story is faster than you can fap withanonymous readerReport 2013-09-18 00:46:49You really need to work on your writing. It was a little fast and the sex scene was incomplete. It was a little fast and the sex scene was incomplete. This one is full of writing errors as well as leaving the reader wondering why you omitted the whole second page. You seemed to be in a great hurry to dash this off and go do something else. This one is full of writing errors as well as leaving the reader wondering why you omitted the whole second page. You seemed to be in a great hurry to dash this off and go do something else. It really needs to be at least a page longer to flesh out the story.
